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This week we carried out our pitches for our outline of a script. I explained I chose a feature length film called “One Way” and the overall genre was Sci-Fi, Thriller and Action. I also went through that my audience would ideally be aged 15 plus, due the certificate being a 15 and because of the thriller elements that would be included in the visuals (alien, blood, claustrophobic). After pitching my idea to Shaun and Phil they then asked me a few questions and suggested some more into my head which has helped me to think about how to develop my overall storyline into a better script narrative. A couple things popped up that caught my attention, was the fact that it may work better if comedy was a genre that I should consider (similar to films like Paul and Shaun of the Dead) and should I include an actual Alien due to the huge character driven narrative I already have. These two things have really stood out to me and I am going to revise my outline and possibly try and fit these elements into it, as I really like these ideas.

After three drafts and four hours at the library I have finally got my final script draft! I feel a lot more satisfied with this ending and the fact I clarified Maria and Freeman’s difference in attitude towards war. I now plan on booking in for a tutorial with Shaun and going through anything I could change as a last resort.

Today I gave my feedback back to my partner about her script. We sat down in the kitchen in the media building and we spoke about her script professionally. I told her parts that she could possibly change and I gave solutions that she is open to take and use on her script. I made sure that I gave her detailed and critical feedback but I made sure she actually wanted it before I began. I also showed her my critical evaluation on paper and explained what I meant for each points.

I have received my partners script and have read through it about five times to make sure I give the best feedback I can. Evaluation has been written and plan on talking to her in person about my evaluation.

I also received feedback on my script from Shaun, I am really happy with the feedback and will change the couple of issues he had with my format and one part of the location.

I gave my script to an outsider to scriptwriting and to the university itself and asked them to read through it I also asked them if they engaged with it, if they got confused and if they had to repeat certain parts because they didn’t understand. Luckily they said it was engaging. However they pointed out parts that seemed confusing or too ‘coincidental’. I noted them down then changed a few scenes, doing this gave me an extra page of story.